Medicine Personal Statement Example 7

After working over one hundred hours a week for more than three months, I completed the project to great success.

I had worked hard on this difficult assignment; on the surface, my job was going well. With an MA in Management and a covenant position with a Big Four accounting firm, I had impressive credentials. I had also gained substantial experience working with information systems and performing financial audits and reconciliations.

Why, then, was I not satisfied?

Upon entering my career, I had assumed that professional and financial success would surely bring personal fulfilment.

After some time, however, I became frustrated because I did not enjoy my work. I decided to interview for similar positions. During this process, however, reality hit me: changing companies would not solve my problem because the entire career field did not meet my needs.

This realization triggered a process of self-searching that led me to medicine. This decision did not come quickly or easily. After all, the commitment to provide others with healthcare is a serious decision for anyone, particularly someone with an established career.

As I examined my interests and goals, however, I underwent a process of personal growth that has propelled me towards a career as a physician.

Upon examining my job responsibilities, I realized that I enjoyed the problem-solving duties of my corporate career much more than the specific subject matter. I had always worked hard to understand and communicate my company's line of business.

Furthermore, my detailed programming and financial analysis had identified many profitable opportunities for the company amidst a constantly changing, complicated economy.

Not only did my preferred career emphasize problem solving, but it also allowed me to work closely with others in a caretaking role. When I examined my past, I observed a pattern of volunteer work and leadership; for example, I have donated my time to {PROVIDE ONE OR TWO VOLUNTEER ACTIVITIES and your DUTIES}.

Of course, many careers would allow me to solve problems and benefit others. How did I choose medicine?

A career in medicine will allow me to integrate thoroughly my passion for science into a public-service framework. Since childhood, I have loved acquiring scientific knowledge, particularly involving biological processes. I also have a keen interest in health care policy and public health; while serving as a physician, I plan to pursue additional roles in these fields.

My colleagues at work have commented on my idealism. While many motivate themselves with thoughts of maintaining a high salary or proving their worth through achievements, I have sought to shed those goals in favour of providing tangible health benefits to others.

I have already had more fun than I deserve; I seek the long-term intellectual challenge and interpersonal rewards that accompany work in the medical field.

In making this career transition, I must show evidence of the prolonged commitment, intellectual maturity, and altruism required to excel in medical school and as a physician.

During my undergraduate studies, I displayed my ability to juggle competing demands while still maintaining my academic focus; I have succeeded at school while volunteering part time, spending time with family and friends, and working part-time. To better serve my expected patient population, I plan to take some refresher Spanish classes while in medical school.

I have come to discover that a job and even a good income, absent another significant purpose, will not bring satisfaction. I plan to utilize my assets, namely my problem- solving affinity, strong work ethic, and interpersonal commitment, to craft a stimulating, personally rewarding career in medicine.

Fortunately, I have an opportunity to make a change, and I could not be more grateful. I have taken stock of myself, considering my skills, experiences, and goals. I have looked to family and friends, some of whom are doctors, for advice. Because of this self-examination, I have decided to pursue a career in healthcare.

The process has been difficult at times but always illuminating. Throughout it all, I have never lost confidence-the confidence that I will actively absorb all available medical knowledge, forge friendships with fellow students, and emerge from my training as a skilful and caring physician.

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very different and

very different and interesting

A fantastic statement and v

A fantastic statement and v helpful in terms of structure.

why did u put in a rhetorical

why did u put in a rhetorical q?

[b]Admin:[/b] edited for abusive lanauage.

What does the word "tangible"

What does the word "tangible" convey in your statement. Are not all health benefits tangible, or are some intangible or do you just not understand the meaning of the word tangible.

Rhetoricals?

Not sure rhetoricals are appropriate in a medical school app. Mainly due to the inherent condescending effect they have. I think it gives the impression that a) you don't think the person reading is smart enough to notice the pertinant points and b) it looks like you just don't have a lot to say about yourself.. space filler if you like. And isn't this way too long? I had loads of trouble fitting things into my PS, how did you manage to get away with something this long?? and where did you put it?

"{PROVIDE ONE OR TWO

"{PROVIDE ONE OR TWO VOLUNTEER ACTIVITIES and your DUTIES}."

I love the whole "fill in the blanks" style! All adds to the "altruistic" persona you are trying to convey...

IT SUCKED (sorry)

didnt really like the statement. it was long and for lack of better words it was sh*t boring. did you even get a place in med school. The statement didnt convey your interest, all it dipicted was an arrogent, long winded man, who just wants to believe that they are good enough for something they just cant handle. thank you for listening.

I've seen this before! It's

I've seen this before! It's from some American personal statement help website... isn't that plagarism...?

plagarism...?

Might it have been getintouni.com where you saw this statement before?

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did that actually fit onto

did that actually fit onto UCAS? i thought the limit was 4000 characters..

the part about "absorbing all

the part about "absorbing all available medical knowledge" is ridiculous and makes the otherwise good statement slightly laughable.

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i was slightly confused by the language in the PS. i am also wondering if you are talkin about what skills you could bring to the medical profession what are your actual interests?? you seem arrogant and self-absorbed. did you get a place in the medical area you wanted to go into??

this is excellent and

this is excellent and definitely unique - which universities did you apply to, and which did you get offers from?

this is not very good.

this is not very good.

It needs to be redrafted

This personal statement is effectively split in two halves. The first half discusses achievements in your most recent job. I cannot sift out anything which discusses your suitability for medicine. It reads like a complaint, your experience and viewpoint expressed in aggressive terms e.g. "frustrated", "did not enjoy", "not satisfied"....the emphasis on "not" is quite heavy, and selectors can read between the lines. You give generalisations of your skills, and don't provide any evidence of any of it. In the second half you make a poor attempt to discuss your suitability for medicine, because again you do not give any evidence for your skills. There is a strong emphasis on "income", and that can be misinterpreted. Also, it's a bad idea to talk about others "motivating themselves with a high salary", because it makes you appear superior, conceited (and maybe a little jealous). And don't fall into the "I did well at school" trap....of course you should have done well!! If you're applying for medicine, they expect you to have "succeeded". When I finished reading this, I pictured someone who was dissatisfied with his job (perhaps due to the salary), decided to go into medicine, feigned an interest in science, and was forced to use generalisations of his skills without evidence....because really he/she hadn’t taken any steps to teach themselves more about the career. I'm sure you're a genuine guy, but this is what I inferred from your statement. Some serious redrafting needed (if you haven’t already submitted it)...hope this helped.

Have you done the BMAT and

Have you done the BMAT and UKCAT?
How was it?

How do you register for BMAT?

Hi hun great personal st8ment

Hi hun great personal st8ment. Jus a question-hw do unis knw ur nt lying abt work expperience, ne1 can easily mk it up!!
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you need to evidence work

you need to evidence work experience in a portfolio i believe. and fyi i hate text talk.

I personally think it's good

I personally think it's good but by any chance is there 'fill in the blanks' because you don't actualy have any relevant work experience?

i just want to raise a few

i just want to raise a few questions...
I'm a student of medicine.
But doubts creep in when it comes to satisfaction levels of patients with the physicians...
There are many diseases in which there is no cure and life long treatment is required just to improve their quality of life... Like rheumatoid arthritis, chronic obstructive pulmonary disease... And that too at a cost where most people in the developing world find it difficult to afford..
There are very less diseases where one can completely cure the patients..

So all these and much more problems discourage one to practice medicine

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